User:Ajaslay/Prenatal stress/Pleighs Peer Review

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General info[edit]

Whose work are you reviewing?

pleighs

Link to draft you're reviewing
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ajaslay/Prenatal_stress?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Prenatal stress

Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]

Lead: I like the changes that were made to the leading paragraph. I would either take out the sentence about mental illness or add more information beyond that one sentence, because mental illness during pregnancy and prenatal stress aren't necessarily synonymous. Good job being concise and information. I would suggest referencing more of the body paragraphs (such as sexual dimorphism) into the intro paragraph.

Content: I like the paragraph you have decided to add. For the grammar of the first sentence of your "impact on development" paragraph, I think cognitive and social match the sentence structure better than cognitively and socially. I like how you tied in ethical concerns. I am interested to see where you place this paragraph among the others. I think the published article, as a whole, could use better flow between sections.

Tone and Balance: Good job remaining neutral and unbiased.

Sources and References: References look good.

Organization: Content is well written. As mentioned above published article could use some reworking/reorganization. Article has several stand alone sentences that could be developed into stronger, more voluminous paragraphs.

Images and Media: No images or media used. Adding some images may help enhance the article.

Overall Impression: Edits are looking good overall. Published article could use some strengthening in areas mentioned above.