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User:H2012AL/Epidemiology of schizophrenia/CorwinBM Peer Review

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General info[edit]

Whose work are you reviewing?

H2012AL

Link to draft you're reviewing.
User:H2012AL/Epidemiology of schizophrenia
Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
Epidemiology of schizophrenia

Evaluate the drafted changes[edit]

(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


After a quick glance at your draft, I noticed that there was only one reference, uncited, at the bottom, and that none of the sentences have any citations. For single groups, we needed 2-3 references, so think about adding at least one more source. You also should cite your source after sentences that have information you got from the source. The source you have looks good though.

Another thing I noticed was that the first three sentences of the United States section all end, "in the United States". This is quite repetitive, and I think it would sound better if you reworded one or two the those.

I think your organization is good, and you have a neutral tone.